Thodar kirukalgal

[kirukan]

"Thozhil unakku theyvamanal
Theyvam unakku thozhanavan"

"Patrinri patru vaithaal
Bagavan un pathathil"

"un UL aganthayai KADA
un UL asaiyai KADA
un UL athirathai KADA
un UL azhukai KADA
un UL ivatrai KADAnthal
KADA UL un kaladiyil"

"Arulai thedu-atharkku
Asiramathai nadathey
bagavanai prathi-atharkku
premanathakalukku bali agathey
sasthirangalai sey-atharkku
chathurvedigalidam(poli) saranadaiyathey"

"theyvathai thuthi
manithanai mathi
manithanai mithithu
theyvathai thuthithall -unaku
neye seyum sathi...."

[xlntbarani]

Muthaal matrum kadaisi para's are fantastic - idea and words handled.

[b]
"Thozhil unakku theyvamanal
Theyvam unakku thozhanavan"

"theyvathai thuthi
manithanai mathi
manithanai mithithu
theyvathai thuthithall -unaku
neye seyum sathi....
[\b]

but...


"Bagavan un pathathil"

"KADA UL un kaladiyil"


Indha varigalil ulla vaarthai prayodam sari illai.

Yellorum padikkarathu... Thavarana Sindhanaya thoondum....

Naan bakthi mealitla itha sollala

Nijamana bakthi irrukuravangalukku ithanala onnum illa

but,

Idhamadhiri innemea venam...

Idhama sollunga ungaloda karuthugalai... em... sariya....

Sorry.. pa

But Kavidhaiyoda - Karu Nalla irrukku...

Ok va

Sorry

[kirukan]

Thanx barani for ur comments

"Bagavan un pathathil'
"kadavul un kaladiyil"

I didnt use these words to hurt any one even god.
I meant if we are sincire in our job god will work for us as a servant.
Ithu kadavulai thazhvu paduthuvathagathu....
Pitukku man sumakka vilayaa..?
sevaganaga pani puriya vilaya...?
So nan antha arthathil than eluthinen..?
Nam kadavulai mana poorvamaga nambi nam kadamaigalai ozhungaga seythal kadavul nam nanbanavan enru...

anyways thanx for ur comments...
pardon me if my words hurt u or anyone...

Siva

[gragavan]

Well tried. wonderful word usage.

And I feel those two lines are fine.
"Bagavan un paathathil" and "Kadavul un kaaladiyil"
even thiruvalluvar stated the god comes to work for the those who do good things with full dedications. Better the words could have been rephrased.

More are expected.

Regards,
Ragavan

[gautham]

theyvathai thuthi
manithanai mathi
manithanai mithithu
theyvathai thuthithall -unaku
neye seyum sathi...."


nice!!!.....thevathai pottrum pothu manitha naeyathayum miha yelimayaana vaarthaigalaal...alahupaduthi yeluthi iruppathu kulanthaihalukkum puriyum!!!!....arumai....

[kirukan]

Thanx gautham and raghavan

Thanx for ur comments.
I wrote these while traveling in bus in midnight after hearing the arrest news of chathurvethi.
That news was the inspiration behind these poem's.

[gautham]

chathurvathi matter?..oh...great....u should read my poems in this poem in topics swamigal & swamigal special & send ur comments please....

[mohans]

..those were fantastic words..

Great Siva..

Manidha neyamum,
Manamum irundhal

Iraivanai unmayaga thuthikka ennam varum..

unmai varigal..arthangalai pirithu ezhidhiyullirgal..

veruedhenum padaipugal ullanavo....