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14th November 2004, 12:17 PM
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Topic started by Cygnus (pg) (ganymede_europa@yahoo.com) (@ cavalier250.is.temple.edu) on Sat Apr 3 19:47:47 EST 2004.


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14th November 2004, 12:17 PM
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ţΠÅóÐ ¾¢ÕõÀ¢Â ÅÄ¢ Åâ¸Ç¢§Ä Ò⸢ÈÐ!


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14th November 2004, 12:17 PM
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// '¦ƒð Ä¡ì'-þø ´Õ Å¡Ãõ ¸Æ¢óÐ
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þýÛõ þÃñÎ ¬ñθǢø... //

how beautifully narrated!! especially, the crisp narration of the inevitable routine // «Å÷¸û þÅ÷¸û ±ýÚ ÀðÊÂø §À¡ðÎ þÂó¾¢Ãò¾ÉÁ¡ö ¯È׸û ÒÐôÀ¢òÐ.. // hats off.

'penned by a novice' enbathu mattumey thevaiyaRRathu. u seem really good, as such.


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14th November 2004, 12:17 PM
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¸¾¢÷ ¦º¡øÅÐ ºÃ¢§Â!

"¬ñ§¼! þó¾¡ Åó¾¢ð¼Ûí¸ ¯í¸ «ÊÁ!" ±ýÀÐ §À¡Ä ¾¨Ä
¦º¡È¢óÐ ¦¸¡ûžüÌõ ¸Å¢¨¾ìÌõ ¦¾¡¼÷Ò þø¨Ä!

¿£í¸û ¸Å¢¨¾ ±Ø¾¢Â§À¡§¾ ¸Å¢»É¡¸¢Å¢ðË÷¸û!

¸õÀ£Ãõ¾¡ý ¸Å¢»É¢ý Ó¾ø «¨¼Â¡Çõ!

¯í¸û ¸Å¢¨¾Â¢ø ¿ÂÓõ, ¯½÷×â÷ÅÁ¡É ¦ÅÇ¢ôÀ¡Îõ ¿¢¨È§ŠþÕ츢ÈÐ...

nostalgia / requiem -¯¼ý À¨Æ ¿¢¨É׸¨Ç «¨º§À¡Î¸¢È ͸ò¨¾ ¿ýÈ¡¸ô À¢Ã¾¢ÀÄ¢òÐûÇ£÷¸û!

Å¡ú¸! ÅÇ÷¸! :=)


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14th November 2004, 12:17 PM
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PP, ¸¾¢÷, geno, ¿ýÈ¢¸û ÀÄ ! Ò¾¢Â ÓÂüº¢¦ÂýÀ¾¡ø 'novice' ±ýÚ ÜȢ즸¡ñ§¼ý. þíÌûÇ À¨¼ôÀ¡Ç¢¸Ç¢ý Óý ±ÉÐ ±Øò¾¡üÈø ¸òÐìÌðÊìÌî ºÁ§Á. ¸õÀ£ÃÓñÎ ¸÷ÅÁ¢ø¨Ä !

PS: I have changed my handle to "Cygnus", I guess my springwell of imaginative nom de plumes was quite dry at the time I thught of the previous one :)


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14th November 2004, 12:17 PM
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Cygnus,
Very good attempt !! As geno said, ¿£í¸û ¸Å¢¨¾ ±Ø¾¢Â§À¡§¾ ¸Å¢»É¡¸¢Å¢ðË÷¸û! Å¡÷ò¨¾¸û À¢Ã¾¢ÀÄ¢ìÌõ 'ÅÄ¢' - ¨Â ±ýÉ¡ø ¿ýÈ¡¸§Å ÒâóЦ¸¡ûÇ ÓÊó¾Ð. ¦¾¡¼÷óÐ ÓÂüº¢òÐ ¿¢¨È ±ØÐí¸û!


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14th November 2004, 12:17 PM
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À¡¨ÄÔõ ¿£¨ÃÔõ À¢Ã¢òÐ, À¡¨Ä ÁðÎõ «ÕóЦÁýÚ ¦º¡øÅ¡÷¸§Ç.. «ó¾ «ýÉô ÀȨŨ ¿¢¨ÉòÐ ¿£í¸û unga 'nom de plume' §¾÷× ¦ºö¾¢ÕôÀ¢ý ¿øÄ §¿¡ì¸õ.


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14th November 2004, 12:17 PM
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:-)

ooobss... penned by a novice ?

i doubt... ( may be in forum hub . right ? )

Á¢¸ ¿ýÈ¡¸ ÅóÐûÇÐ pg... ¦¾¡¼Õí¸û...

:-)


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14th November 2004, 12:17 PM
Roshan, Suresh, Thank you ! Thodarnthu ezhutha muyarchikkirEn.

Kathir, I chose "Cygnus" based on the constellation by the same name, being the astronomy dabbler that I am. But your explanation is beautiful, copyright paNNalenna athai use- paNNIkkalAmA ?!! hehe !

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14th November 2004, 12:17 PM
Yeah, cygnus, by all means. i saw those two meanings, but guessed (wrongly) that you'd've chosen the one i mentioned. anyway, happy. it's a great name.

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14th November 2004, 12:17 PM
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º¢ìÉŠ - ±í§¸ ¿£í¸û?! :=)


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14th November 2004, 12:17 PM
cygnus,

reviving ur thread.

try and write once in a while!

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14th November 2004, 12:17 PM
Cygnus,

This one has come well. Sometimes , poetry is beautiful without flowery words and similies.

60!

tiruttakkan

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14th November 2004, 12:17 PM
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WOW Cygnus!!...this is simply beautiful...i can relate to everything u have written here...

"«ýÚõ þýÚõ ", is making me homesickkkkk!!! :( :(
post more and more.... :)


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14th November 2004, 12:17 PM
GREAT. LOVED IT.

Dont call urself novice anymore cygnus.
You are promoted(Infact take the credit
of double promotion)

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14th November 2004, 12:17 PM
Thanks tiruttakkan, malligai and Shakthi!!

tiru, 60 marks feels like 90, thanks! I love Wordsworth's simple style that conveys beautifully, feelings that are just underneath the conscious mind, gently floating up now and then, filling up one's soul.

Malligai, this stirs up nostalgic pangs of memories and guilt over my NRI limbo-life for me too :-(

Shakthi,this is was my first 'publication' here, a while ago, double promotion-A?! Yay!!

Special thanks to geno for reviving this thread!!

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14th November 2004, 12:17 PM
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cygnus!

À¢ÃÁ¡¾õ!

«ºò¾¢ð˹¸, §À¡í¸!
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