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Well said Rami !
But sadly, :-( world s becoming such, many dont want relations
probably one day, sitting alone in their lazy boy couch, sitting in front of the flat screen TV, having a HDTV in hand, cool under the split AC, with their favorite jean n tee ....... Ppl will miss something in their life, a happy union ! Family !
rami akka thanks! :)
What made u to write like this? cld u plz expalin?Quote:
Originally Posted by bingleguy
World is not becoming such Bingle, it is all in our hand... we should prioritize our needs... whom/which is important in our life that we need to decide.
In my view this world is very beautiful with lovely friends/relations :)
Arthi .... i meant ... ppl dont want relations !
Sadly that is happenning nowadays !
Thani kudithanam concept can be linked to this .... but not fully, many, though they come seperate, will have contacts with relations, they need ppl ! but many are there who come seperate to move away from the relation world ! Relations i mean, not only blooded relations, even friends, society ... how many of us know our neighbours :-) tell me honestly ... ppl who are living in homes(exclude bachelors who live a joint life) .....
We will be really astonished to know the fact, that hardly we know our next house / next flat person ! Even today townships exist ... for the reason that they all are one ... but think in metros.... how many know their neighbours !?
Wat are we goin to do alone yaar ? Is the above mentioned gadgets our part of life always ? NO ... we need ppl, we need relationships ... we need friends, we need to learn to live together !
This is wat i mentioned Arthi ! Today, metros decide the life of a Country !We decide life in the WEST seeing places like New York n Washington ... but they are not US ... they are just part of US ! Similarly ppl in Metros here n India, play an important role in deciding how our Country is focussed ! Many of them, particularly young couples, wanted to lead a lonely life ... donno why ... sorry to say, he for her life fulla irukka mudiyumaa :roll: they need family !
hm i donno my neighbour, iam trying to pass my hi to her, but she is always invisible! somehow thats true...................life and the way we live sucks these days.Quote:
Originally Posted by bingleguy
we think job and our family is enough and specially for those who live in foreign......................life is miserables!
cant blame foreign.................but donno.... people change so quickly here in foreign countries and people get sick of their life and people even get depressed.
we no longer know how to smile, we get suspicious to smile!
maybe this THE AGE OF KALI :lol:
Oh that is why you cry often :lol:Quote:
Originally Posted by crazy
Just kidding Crazy, take it sportively :)
Hi Bingle, was away from the net for the last ten days so I read 17,18 (and the ensuing exchanges about 18) today.
17 was very stylish, highly visual (as the rest of the story has been till now). From the clove oil to the slip-ogler, you made him go places. The chapter ended with a nice hook. I have always liked that style and have said so here. So I take the liberty of saying the following:
18 was disappointing. One person talking, raining opinions, arguing in well chosen words are of such prehistoric style that ill-suite a visual storyteller such as you.
The arguments and responses to 18 show that you are eager to discuss moral rights and wrongs (thankfully only discuss not establish them). Fine, but that cannot be at the cost of the storytelling. Establishing what each character thinks and emptying out the persona in her own words serves to (slightly) undo your rich characterizations.
Moreover as a storyteller your only commitment is to the story. Secondary agendas (if you have any such - like moral arguments) must be dealt with brutal coldness.
If we didn't get the seating arrangement subtlety the first time, we'll get it when Aditi and Akash converse. And even if we do miss it, the loss is ours not yours. Why do I mention this: because the eagerness to communicate often dulls the writer's subtlety, which will be a huge loss.
It is perfectly fine to reward the careful readers.
Of course my reading may be completely wrong and I may be overreacting. The long conversation may be more than just a pulpit talk and may actually be central to the story to come. In that case I'd be glad to be wrong.
cheers !
Digression: Who is that in your icon ?
Prabhu ram ji ,
that is bingle himself..
I agree ! Lets forget wat is given here ! But i personally feel there shld be discussion like facts n happennings ... sometimes to give completeness to the character !Quote:
Originally Posted by Prabhu Ram
There is no necessity for JKB to get the influence of a girl and drinks in Sindhu Bhairavi ... but that was necessary to show that he is derailing from his original path - MUSIC !
Here i ve used a similar showcase ! Shree did have an experience, that shld have been understood from the last sentence of Saga 18 :-) here i ve used her experience and family thoughts (i understand that u are aware of such kind of feelings... are still prevalent in brahmin houses .. even today) ~ This was the one, which i wanted to show here ! Also there is something related to this coming forward :-)
:roll:Quote:
If we didn't get the seating arrangement subtlety the first time, we'll get it when Aditi and Akash converse. And even if we do miss it, the loss is ours not yours. Why do I mention this: because the eagerness to communicate often dulls the writer's subtlety, which will be a huge loss.
It is perfectly fine to reward the careful readers.
Bulls eye ! It was a pulpit about the character Shree .... her experience and very much her feeling about LOVE ! well i wont say this would form a central to the story to come, but still this will play a role in the story to come :-)Quote:
Of course my reading may be completely wrong and I may be overreacting. The long conversation may be more than just a pulpit talk and may actually be central to the story to come. In that case I'd be glad to be wrong.
cheers !
Prabhu sir ... :-) That is me ! :-)Quote:
Digression: Who is that in your icon ?
I think I did not make myself clear. Showing the existing feelings and arguments and painting a picture of the social set-up thought process may be important, but doing it via a monologue was a slight dip in style. Shree's emotional scars could have been hinted without elaborating her arguments, or so I felt.Quote:
Originally Posted by bingleguy
I'm not sure the analogy applies. It would have applied if JKB tried to go extempore about his opinion on love in general and how it messed with his music.Quote:
Originally Posted by bingleguy
I seem to have given the impression that I am not interested in any of Shree's experiences and feelings. On the contrary I am eager to know about her ideas and experiences that caused the ideas. That is because I am able to visualize her as a person thanks to your detailed characterization. So the eagerness is itself is the result of your minimal and highly visual narrative style. All I wanted to say was, for the first time in the story there was more "tell" than "show".
All said and done, there is no denying 18 did tell a lot about Shree. I eagerly await the next instalment.
Oh great. I guess Prabhu should do (then) :-) .Quote:
Originally Posted by bingleguy
HENS HIM
avan oru mirugam Shree looked at Sharmi n said, ys, avan oru mirugam....... enna kooda vittu vekkaadha mirugam .....
Sharmi looked at her eyes .................................................
enakku theriyum Shree
so saying she slowly moved her chin towards her left shoulder and bent down seeing the soft imported pebbles in the college garden
Shree looked at her with perplexed face Sharmi, enna solra .... ?
Amaam, enakku theriyum !
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"ivanga rendu perayum pirichadhu mukkiyam illada..... Avo ! Avo dhaan enakku mukkiyam ! nyaabagam irukka simma, nadu conference room la, ATHTHANA perukku munnadiyum ......................"
with a folded fist, Aswath striked the tank of his brand new Avenger !
:arrow:
Narasimhan, wading thru the crowd, took Aswath by his left arm dragged him ... Aswath's eye were completely fixed on Shree's, who is still heaving with a blaze on her eyes
Dei machan, marandhu du daa, veenaa edhukku indha vishayathaiye ninaichukittu irukka .... was Simma's voice when he really shrugged when Aswath turned his raging face towards him
he got up from his Avenger which was standing majestic n its side stand..... Aswath's eyes were furious and fixed on Simma...
Simma was unable to move an inch, when he saw Aswath's eyes and said machan, machan...... ok ok ..... seri ... naan onnum sollala ... okvaa ... vaa, innikki unnoda mooda maathanum, padathukku polaam vaa .... where Simma took Aswath's right hand with much difficulty and kept it on the throttle n starting the ignition key on.....
Aswath's Avenger waded thru the Raja Gopuram entering the main road went straight, still knowing that it was a No Entry..... He sped thru the busy main road towards amma mandapam .....
The breaks screeched when they reached amma mandapam, Aswath slided his bike on the side road of the mandapam and parked it right in front of the Bath complex.
padathukku polayaa daa while Simma was querying but without caring for his words, Aswath started walking towards the steps ... Simma was still behind the bike which still on . he switched off the bike, made it slant a lil on the concrete platform and took the keys n turned back to see Aswath missing on the steps......
Simma took his heels off the bike and walked fast towards the steps and saw below and stopped moving further ... he attempted to go further but was stopped by voice oru nimisham He was startled and turned back to see Sharmi.
She slowly shifted her head from left to right back to the left indicating Simma not to walk further .... they both looked at the steps down below to see Aswath sitting in the last step with his feet touching the river Cauvery. He had his Lee folded to have them safe from getting wet.
The railings which were installed to forbid ppl from moving away from the safe bathing zone could see him sitting with his hands picking the small pebbles from the steps and throwing them into the water. One or two even touched the railings and some spalashing water and leaving droplets on it !
Aswath's eyes were firmly fixed on the water which was gushing in front of him, though not fully over the bed, but in the edges ..... with the beautiful Cauvery bridge and the Rock fort in the background giving the evening a soothing touch.
:arrow:
Simma and Sharmi were watchin this from the top and didnt move an inch. Simma turned back to her......
Next target naan dhaane Sharmi broke the silence
Simma kept his head down n looked over his right n looked at Sharmi back again .... enna .. enna target ? with his eyes moving away from Sharmi ....
enna paaru shrilled Sharmi's voice to which Simma responded immediately without shifting his eyes away from her.
adutha target naanga rendu peru dhaane .... idhu dhaane ungaloda romba naal plan, Swetha va piricha, Lakshmi ya piricha ... ippo avo kooda irukkardhu naan mattum dhaane ....
illa ... stammered Simma, illa sharmi .... appadi illa
vera eppadi
avan ... avan vendam nnu ninachan ... adhaan
adhukku .... thaniya pirichu enna saadhikka pora ..... avan dhaan appadi ninachaannna unakku budhi enga pochu.....
illa ....
vendam .... nee onnum solla vendam ..... avaa prachanai avalae theethukkattum ....
so saying they both turned back to watch Aswath again ....
:arrow:
The railing is not witnessing a sound, preferrably to be said a salangai oli ..... near Aswath .... those little legs came down walking from the steps and stopped near Aswath .... Hearing the sound beside him abruptly stopping, he turned around to his right to see a beautiful face shining orangish, in the evening light of the sun in the west !
That was Shree ......................
She looked like an angel in the white half saree with a beautifully combed hair and a small thilakam on her forehead and a smile on her face ........
She came down few steps more to sit next to him !
Saga 19 : HENS HIM is the anagram of SHE n HIM
We will be amazed to know about Sunshine and Shadow = Show in Sun and Shade
next to whom??????Quote:
She came down few steps more to sit next to him !
bg kadai supera pogudhu, aana eppo main pointukku varuveenga.
i cant even guess how the story gonna end :)
Boy you are making it more and more intriguing. Every :arrow: sign is followed by a different stream. A recap, a quick look back, the conversation between Narasimhan and Sharmi that reveals precious little and then the completely different last paragraph.
Every chapter has ended with a hook. This one is among the most nervous spots you have left us in. I share the exclamation mark that ends the chapter :-) I suspect the last paragraph is a few steps back in time, but with you there's no guessing. Very good writing.
Prabhu Ram ! Do i make things intriguing ? :-) i take that as a compliment !Quote:
Originally Posted by Prabhu Ram
Ys, i use the arrow marks to indicate two things ... if tis simultaneously happenning or difference in time ! here i ve used it to show simultaneous happennings ! :-)
Many feel that i am goin offtrack or deviating from the central theme... but here if u really observe, certain dishes need better cooking and shld be served better ! i dont believe in re-heating but serving hot with an attraction which will pull u n make u eat ! Hence certain decorations are needed for dishes !
Bingle.. I missed this yesterday..
The suspense is maintained well.. The pace of the story deserves a :clap:
Very well written. That should say it all. :)
:notworthy: Shakthi
Bingle u remind me of Thyagu Sir..He was my maths tution teacher..
BG,this is a nicer picture of yours :)
Thanks Ssanjinika , i take them as ur compliments :-)
it is a compliment vasanth.munnadi pictures'la face avalo seriya theriyalla edhula nalla errukenga :)
THE PRESS RIFT
That was Shree ......................
She looked like an angel in the white half saree with a beautifully combed hair and a small thilakam on her forehead and a smile on her face ........
She came down few steps more to sit next to him !
Shree softly turned at Aswath. he was stunned, and his hand which were throwing stones abruptly stopped half-way thru with the pebble still in his hand. Frowing he threw the stone with more force than usual.
The stone missed the water zone and fell on the mud water splashing droplets around it. Shree had to forcibly move back her face away from the splashing droplets touching her face.
She turned back to see Aswath watching away from her with his lips moving but no voice coming out of them.
She took her right arm and cleared the single thread hair which was on her forehead and face due to her sudden turning, and touched her chin and slowly wiped off the drops. She cleared her throat .... and hearing the voice, Aswath clasped his hands more tightly.
Aswath .....
with a sudden jerk he stood up, watched her looking up his face with a gently bayam kalandha smile .... n turned back to walk over the steps ... he would nt have reached the third step but was forced to stop by a firm n obstinate voice sayin ....
oru nimisham..... unna pathi ........ naan konjam pesanum .......
enna pathiyaa .... he gave grin on his face, slowly taking his thumb n wiping his nose off, enna pathi..... nee pesarthukku enna irukku ... modalla, enakkum unakkum enna irukku? and turned away from her raised his forefinger towards teh running Cauvery.... andha cauvery oda ellam mudinju poche ... he gave a grin again
Shree looked at her toes and looked straight at his face n said enakku theriyum, aana ippo ......... she moved her head to a straight position and looked at his eyes straightly .......... mudinjadhu mudinjadhudhaan ..... Cauveryoda vittadhu ........vittadhudhaan.....
Aswath suddenly kept a blunt face and took his lowerlip under his upper jaw and slowly released it ....
naan Sharmi pathi pesanum ......
Aswath shifted his face quickly towards her and came a little closer to Shree
Sharmiyaa .... endha Sharmi ..... he quickly took his right forefinger and kept it under his chin and looked up to give an act of thinking ....
oru nimisham, naan innum solli mudikkala .... i know wat u planned ... enna manasula vechundu dhaane .........
Aswath's face immediately stopped grinning and he looked at her while his smile was slowly coming down to its original position, he was dumbstruck ......... he started ......
illa, nee ippo onnum solla vendam ... naan solla vandhadha solli mudichuduren .... unna nambara avo... Aswath, i know u better..... u were not a person of this kind.... aana unnoda pidivaadham, possessiveness, kovam ... idellam avalukkaaga nee vidanum...
done ... !? ippo naan pesalaama ? enough of ur advices or akkarai ! nee solli thirindhura alavukku enakku onnum .... he kept his forefinger on his forehead and sneered ... kettu poidala .... i know me ! enna pathi ... UNNA VIDA enakku nanna theriyum ! Purinjudholyo ..... he grinned again .....
enna nee evvalavu easy a paathutta ... enna pathi unakku enna theriyum ? I smoke ... damn it ... doesnt mean that i have to play with somebodys life ! Am very casual ... living life as it comes .... doesnt mean that i am careless ! unakku enna pathi ennikkaavadhu nalla impression irundhirukkaa ? NO ... illave illa ... adhu dhaan enna thooki erijutta .... Anaa, avo appadi illa ... I love her, I sincerely LOVE her ! but u are a weed ! pulluruvi ... sastram, sampradhaayam, jaadhi, pazhakkam nnu yosippye thavira manasu, vaazhkai, unarchi, kaadhal .... hmn ... idha pathi ellam ennikkaavadhu yosichirukkiyaa ! NO .........
annikki ... athana perukku munnadiyum ... hey hey hey ! naan enna avala katti pudichenaa illa avaloda permission illama ennikkaavadhu avo pakkathula vandhirukkenaa ? kai ... kai ya pudichadhukkaaga .... NO ...
his face was red in anger and he seemed a person full of wrath
before he could complete ....
thats enough ! ........ there was silence for two seconds ...Aswath !
idhu dhaan nee enna pathi therinjukittadhu, idhu naala dhaan ..... idhunaala dhaan she kept her damp eyes away from his and then looked back at him taking a deep breath ! marupadiyum solren, unnoda pidivaadham, possessiveness, kovam ! idhu dhaan ! I am not a right choice for u ... but she is !
i know u r not the right choice for me ! I ve found my choice !
am happy ! nee change aaganumnnu dhaan naan ......
before Shree could complete it ... she could see Aswath walking up the steps .... she turned back with her eyes firmly fixed on the flowing river .... she sat on the steps .....
Aswath walked up and walked towards his bike .... he took his arm towards his backpocket and little perplexed and he checked his front pocket of his branded Lee jean .... Just then an arm came right in front of his eyes from behind with the key of his bike ! He took the keys and turned back to find ........ Sharmi standing .............
Sharmila......
amaam, naan dhaan ...
nee... he stammered but overcame and asked nee inga enna panra .....
she was quiet, this made him more thoughtful, he moved near her ..... but by then she took him by his hand and pulled him over
enga ... before Aswath could complete she took him over the steps and they both stood there on the top step and saw down the steps to find .................................................. .
Saga 20 : THE PRESS RIFT is the anagram for HER FIRST STEP. We ve heard about Barbie doll .... but here is wat you have to see wat it is nealy all about -> Barbie doll = I'll bare bod / Babe I'd roll / Liberal bod
:notworthy: ssanjinika :-) thanks again ! saga padichittu unga valueble points n observations podunga !Quote:
Originally Posted by ssanjinika
:clap: :clap:
getting more and more interesting.Anan ennakku onnu puriyala..I thot ashwat was doing all this so that he could piruchify shree and sharmi.But eppo avan sharmi'ya love pannaren-nnu sollaranE.Thot he was in love with shree.
MISDIRECTION :-) tats a style ! :-) keep reading !Quote:
Originally Posted by ssanjinika
bg
super :clap: :clap:
story is moving good..............i cant wait til the next saga!
i thought aswath was a bad guy and shree hated him, but it seems like she was pretending as if she hated him :roll:
anyway unga kadaikku :clap: :thumbsup:
Nice Bingle.. keep going :D
Is it becoz shree didn't reciprocate aswath's love.. he pretends to be in luv with sharmi.. so that shree gets jealous... ? :roll:
Nope Anjali ! :-) Keep guessing !Quote:
Originally Posted by hi
Hi BG,
I was foxed by the last para of Chapter 19. I assumed it was a hop back in time (the "smile in her face" and "sat next to him" parts led me to think this was the past, Shree had hinted at). So Chapter 20 opened up like a nice googly for me.
The "bayam kalandha smile", "Shree looked at her toes","damp eyes" seemed surprisingly new from Shree. The episode showed us a lot more about Shree and still keeping things nicely closeted.
It is all very heroic to say "I am not right for you" but to have the addressee agree readily to it is painful. But to sympathize with the pain you needed to soften up Shree for the reader, which you did very cleverly. Good writing. Redeeming Aswath has also been done very carefully without mushing it too much. I suspect there is a design behind the tempered redemption :-)
Vanakkam Prabhu :-)
Was expecting your comments ... i know they would be penned after a careful and thorough read !
:-) Good to have given u an unexpected opening in this saga !Quote:
Originally Posted by Prabhu Ram
ys, she is not sentimental or any such kind, she is human :-) thats wat i ve depicted her as !Quote:
The "bayam kalandha smile", "Shree looked at her toes","damp eyes" seemed surprisingly new from Shree. The episode showed us a lot more about Shree and still keeping things nicely closeted.
Thanks for that compliment Prabhu :-)Quote:
It is all very heroic to say "I am not right for you" but to have the addressee agree readily to it is painful. But to sympathize with the pain you needed to soften up Shree for the reader, which you did very cleverly. Good writing. Redeeming Aswath has also been done very carefully without mushing it too much. I suspect there is a design behind the tempered redemption :-)
A GRIND DUN SENT
before Aswath could complete she took him over the steps and they both stood there on the top step and saw down the steps to find .................................................. .
Shree sitting in the same place with her legs soaked up in the running Cauvery with her hands placed folded embracing her bent knees and her head bent down between her hands
Sharmi looked at Aswath, while he tried to look away from her. She again looked at Shree and looked back at Aswath
Ashwa .... pidivaadham ..... possessiveness ..... kovam, idhu first time illa da. naan un kitta solla ninachadha avo sollitta...
oh ! appo ellam kettu kittu dhaan ninnu kittu irundhiyaa, enna kootu sadhiyaa....
stop it Ashwa ! avo inga vandhu unna paaka vandhadhu enakku theriyaadhu, unnoda bike inga ninnadha paathen, adhaan vandhen
avala pathi unakku enna theriyum?
enakku .. theriyaadhu ... he smiled and turned his head away n came close to her and watched her eyes.... enakku, avala pathi theriyaadhu .... unna madiri avala porandhadhu lendhe enakku theriyaadhu, aanaa unna...unna vida avala pathi enakku jaasthiyaave theriyum....
Aswath started to turn and walk facing away from her
unakku avalukku pudicha poo theriyumaa ? enakku theriyum
unakku avalukku pudicha subject,place ennannu theriyumaa ? enakku theriyum
unakku avalukku pudicha music,movie, singer edhaavadhu onnu theriyumaa ? enakku theriyum ....
Sharmi looked at him when he turned
Sharmi smiled little and came near him and said en .... unakku avalukku pudichavan .... adhu yaarunnu theriyumaa ?
adhuvum unakku theriyum ... but unnoda possessiveness ! adhu unna vidala ... unakku avo mattum dhaan ulagam,illa?
Ashwa, avalukku pudicha poova pathi therinju vechindiye, andha poova avo thanakku sondhamaa vechu paathirukkiyaa ?
avalukku pudicha music, movie, subject nnu varusiyaa sonniye, andha music movie a vida periya vishayam avaloda charactera fulla purinjundiyaa .... ? pudicha vishayangala mattumae yosicha nee, unna avalukku pudichidhaa nnu yosichiyaa .... ?
Ashwath slowly looked at her eyes, he could see a sparkle in her eyes and the smile of hers was not unrealistic....
unnoda pidivaadham, unna yosikka vidala .......
unnoda possessiveness, unna maathiduthu ........
hmn, idhellam enakku eppadi theriyum nnu paathiyaa ......... avo vera naan vera illa Ashwa ....
unakku pudichadha pathi dhaan nee yosichiye thavira, unna pidichavangala pathi nee yosikkave illa ...
idhu varaikkum avo un kitta ennikkaavadhu pesaama irundhirukkaalaa? but avaloda limit a thaandi pesinadhu illa
idhu varaikkum avo un kooda pazhagaama irundhirukkaalaa? but avaloda limit a thaandi pazhaginadhu illa
nee avala thappa purinjukitta ... avaloda openness ayum, veguli thanathaiyum LOVE appadinnu purinju kitta .... anaa ippavum, en eppavum unnoda appadi oru nimisham kooda irundhadhu illa ....
hmn, unnoda proposal a avo kitta sollum podhu ... avalukku orey shock, avo annikkike unkitta sollitta illa .... adhuvum evvalavu polite aa solliruppa ....
nee dhaan, marupadiyum marupadiyum avala thondharavu pannikittu irundha.... idho, idhe idathula ... indha idathula avo un kitta pesinadhu unakku nyaabagam illaya ...
When Aswath raised his finger to converse something .... Sharmi interrupted ... theriyum, appo annikki propose panni rose koduthappo en vaangikkittannu dhaane kekka vara ... hmn, annikki nee enna avo thaniyaa irukkum podhaa koduthaa ... avoloda class la ellarum irukkum podhu kodutha ....... hmn, appo mattum avo ninaichirundhaa appove moonjiya thrippikittu poirukka mudiyum ... illa athana friends munnadiyum unna .... cha ... andha avamaanam kooda varakkoodaadhunnu dhaan avo vaangikitta .... appuram unna paathu avo idha explain pannala ...
Ashwa, enakku theriyum ! but idhu athanaiyum paatha appuramum naan unna verukkala ...
Ashwath was stunned to hear this from Sharmi !
Ys, idhu ellame enakku theriyum .... ellamae .... but still... naan unna thaan .... she sniffed and turned to her left for a second and looked at Ashwath and gave a smile .......
nee adha purinjukkaama illa ... but unnoda possiveness avala vittu kodukkala, unnoga kobam, en moolamaa avala emaatha thoondradhu ..... Ashwa ! nee avalayo illa ennayo emaathala ... unnaye emaathikkira ....
When Sharmi and Ashwath were talking face on, Shree appeared in between them ... there was absolute muteness and hush at that very moment ...
Sharmi tooka an apace to see Shree's face and tardily looked at Ashwa and then looked at toes .... Ashwa was speechless and seemed realizing.... him too, for the first time, with his head bent down !
Ashwa, unable to bear the silence, tried to move away, by that time ....
Ashwath ........ Shree called him politely .... oru nimisham .... he stood as such like a log, unable to turn his face at Shree, looking away from her .....
Shree .... avana vidu ..... said Sharmi .... so saying moved towards Shree ....
Naan poganum .... so saying Aswath started to move ....
Shree climbed a step to call him again ... when she slipped and losing the balance, fell rolling down on the rocky steps ... within a moment that both Sharmi n Ashwath didnt realize, Shree had rolled down 4-5 steps .... with Sharmi shouting
Shreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee .........................
Saga 21 : A GRIND DUN SENT is the Anagram of UNDERSTANDING. Something that wakes u up from ur ZZZZZZZzzing ..... Snooze Alarms = Alas! No More Z's :-)
Bingle..... Great going...
bg............. :thumbsup: :clap:
bg enakku onnum puriyala.........inga yaar yaara love pannra? :roll:
Ashwath --------> Shree
Sharmi ---------> Ashwath
Shree ?????????
koodiya seekiram indha Equation a complete aayidum :-)Quote:
Originally Posted by rami
naan thinking..................... :)Quote:
Originally Posted by bingleguy
waiting for ur next saga :)
An early KB style scene.
I imagined each line being punctuated with a increasing pitch of violin notes.JangQuote:
Originally Posted by sharmi
JagajangQuote:
Originally Posted by "sharmi
a high-pitch piece lasting a full five seconds.Quote:
Originally Posted by sharmi
Some mystery untied here. The story is interestingly poised. We await the next episode.
PS: Sathi-Mathi ? Long time no see.
:lol: Prabhu ! appadiye background music koduthu asathiteengalae ! :-)
Thanks for the compliments !
Sathi-mathi .... :-) soon !
A SCREENS TOLD
Shree climbed a step to call him again ... when she slipped and losing the balance, fell rolling down on the rocky steps ... within a moment that both Sharmi n Ashwath didnt realize, Shree had rolled down 4-5 steps .... with Sharmi shouting
Shreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee .........................
Ashwa inga paren .... Shree.... Shree ... Sharmi ran down the steps to see Shree lying face down. Ashwath turned rapidly came down towards them, for a moment hesitating but killing all his egoistic feelings ran and saw Sharmi trying to lift Shree's head
Shree had a thick bruise on her forehead, but still closing her eyes .... meanwhile two three guys who were bathing nearby came up to gather around Sharmi who was having Shree on her lap still unconscious ....
Thanni, thanni ... hearing one of the men shouting Ashwath ran down the steps took his handkerchief and immersed it and brought it back wet ... crushed it to sprinkle some water on Shree's face .... still they could feel no reaction on his face ....
auto, dei velu ... auto koopidunga da ... shouted a man with a big moustache ... yaaru ma indha ponnu...
en... ennoda friend dhaanga sniffed Sharmi ... holding Shree's cheeks and chin, moving it to give her consiousness .... Shree Shree ... inga paaru .... she gently patted on her cheeks ... Shree ...
Sharmi looked at the perplexed Ashwath ...
anne, auto nne ... shouted on man on top ...
Without much thinking Ashwath said .... anne, konjam thalaya pudichikanga .... so saying he grabbed her by legs and slowly three men lifted her and then running slowly near the auto ...
Sharmi was running behind helpless ....
Sharmi ... nee kooda ukkaru ... inga nursing home .....giving a question look asked Aswath
thanvandhiri aaspathirikki kku kootikki ponga pa ... inga dhaan periyaar nagar la irukku ...
illeenga avanga chittappa oru clinic vechirukkaaru ... inga dhaan pakkathula dhaan, naan paathukkiren ... said sharmi while the auto driver kicked the bajaj auto to a steering start .... the auto sneered away from the crowd
Sharmi was seeing Shree still without consiciousness .... lying with her head swinging behind the seat ... Sharmi slowly gave her forearm from behind and supported her head ... The auto entered the Raghavendra madam road and took a right towards West gate road .... and reached Sri Ranga's Clinic in 4 minutes ....
Ashwath was right behind the auto ... while Sharmi asked him to call for her chittappa ... Sharmi ... naan pudichikkiren , medhuvaa erakkidalaam, ulla kootindu pogalaam .... seekiram ...
By this time one of the man who had come with his wife ran down to help Ashwa and Sharmi to bring Shree inside the clinic .... when the nurse came out to switch the front light .... realizing who it is ... ran back to the room to inform Dr. Srinivasan ....
By the time Srinivasan got up ... Sharmi n Ashwa with the other man brought Shree inside ... Srinivasan, keeping the cool head of a doc, directed them to leave her on the bed ... Sharmi ...ennamma aachu ... meanwhile he takes Shree's right hand and checked the pulse ....
Sharmi was very much agitated and confused, she was constantly pestering nanna dhaan pesindu irundhaa, thadikki vittu vizhundhutta ....... ippo eppadi irukku maama ? ....... meanwhile Aswath entered the clinic again after paying the auto driver though he refused to take the money .....
okok, shes normal, kavala padaadha ... nothing to worry .... by that time, Sharmi seeped tears in her eyes ... SHarmi, adhaan onnum illannu sonnene, dont worry, everything will be perfectly alright ...
mayakk... mayakkamaa irukkaalae maama, enna aachu
onnum illa, adi patta vegam, avvalavu dhaan, indha injection pottadhukkkappuram ellam seriyaayidum .... ok, dont worry
but still he wasnt able to control Sharmi, by that time, Ashwa moved towards Sharmi, vaa namba veliyila nikkalaam .... so hearing him, Sharmi moved out of the doc's room and walked outside with her left forearm wiping off the tears in her cheeks...
Ashwa went n stood outside near his bike and turned back to see SHarmi sniffing and walking towards him. He could see her eyes red and disturbed...while he saw Srinivasan coming out n calling...
kanna ... unh ...unnoda per enna ...
Ashwath ...
Anh, Ashwath, oru favour da kanna , thalaila adippattadhu naala, it would be better if we could scan her, nee konjam en kooda variyaa, we shall take her to the hospital ... anh, please ...
sure doctor... varen replied Ashwath ...
Ashwa said to Sharmi nee veetukku po, naan paathukkaren ...
vendam, naanum kooda varen
illa vendam Sharmi, unnaala control panna mudiyala ...
illa, paravaa illa, am ok, naan varen ... said Sharmi
Oh, Good, Good so saying Srinivasan opened the back door of his car while the nurse came with a little force on her leaps ....
Doctor ......................
Srinivasan turned to see her hands showing towards the clinic ... seeing that he rushed inside.... Ashwa n Sharmi giving each other pale looks stood there in dead silence ... hurridly started walking towards the clinic .....................
Saga 22 : A SCREENS TOLD is the anagram of SECONDS LATER...Children, Students, Employees are all set for something called Vacation Times = I'm Not as Active, would that be a slogan or a reality ? ;-)
BG
kadhai suuuuuuuuuuuuuuuper.............appo eppavo sonnadhadhaan ippavum sollren.............iam clueless...........story enga pogudhunne theriyala..........very intresting :clap: :thumbsup: