Ah ! Nice restart :thumbsup:
kadhaiyE maRanthu pOgara nilamai aayidichu. Hope you write more frequently.
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Ah ! Nice restart :thumbsup:
kadhaiyE maRanthu pOgara nilamai aayidichu. Hope you write more frequently.
who'es missing? :)
Let me List
He's missing
Wat .. enna solra Venkat .. hows that possible ? he is very important . Aruns heart was beating fast when he says this and takes his fingers to his forehead
Ya I knw Arun but .
Arun takes his fingers to his hips .. No buts .. do u know the consequences ??? he is still under observation .. with his face turning red hot ..... will call u later .
Arun .
Call u later Venkat . Bye .. before he could answer back, Arun pressed the end button . And holds the mobile tight in his fist .. biting his teeth with his lips hiding them . by the time he heard Bhashyams voice . he turns and walks towards Bhashyam . When the doctor comes to join them
Congratulations Arun .when still the reddish face manages to smile back . Which gave a little pause to the doc . Who smiles at Bhashyam
Srini, eppo da kozhandhaya aathukku kootindu pogalaam .
Well soon .. Arun . Shree ya paathiyaa . Says the doc, when he could observe the perplexed mind of Arun, when Arun, suddenly hearing answers back in smile .
Ahn . Anh it was a call from Singapore .... So saying Arun walks down to the elevator .
Enna da ivan .. indha samayathula thala kaal puriyaadhu dhaan .. says Srini with a giggle . Adhukkaaga ippadiyaa .. while Bhashyam smiles along with him but the perplexed face of Arun ran in his mind as a flash.
Arun enters the room, walks up to Shree to see her with eyes closed . He could see the sound of the clock ticking the Micky Mouses eyes watching him . With the hands showed a morning 4 am He goes around the bed walking as quietly as possible and reaches for the cradle to see his son . The silence was suddenly broken by the babys cry .. he was taken back for a second .. and his face reveals the fear of the silence break . And sees two hands near his baby . And with a dropping forehead looks up to see .. Shree lifting his crying son .
Enna Arun .. enna aachu .. so saying Shree prepares herself to feed her baby . While seeing him sweating .. Arun .
Anh .. ya . So saying he lifts his head which was pale n scary in the darkness ..
Enna aachu ..
Onnum onnum illa .. nothing
Pinna en ippadi verkardhu ..
he quickly reaches for his handkercheif and wipes his forehead to find droplets on .. ya ya . Nothin . Nee enna panra .
Adhu seri . Sss ouch
Hey hey enna ..
Ok ok nothing cmon Arun . Unna maadiriye un payyanum . Nauty daddy nauty kiddy so saying she turns back with her lower lip under her teeth
Are u ok .. ?
I am ok .. enna idhu china kozhandha maadiri Neenga aathukku pongo amma inga irukka .. naalaikku kaarthaala varalaam ..
Hearing nothing more than his silence . Shree lifts her sleeping doll and keeps him on the cradle to watch him closely .. kisses him gently on his forehead . And slowly gets down from the bed .. to move closely to Arun, who was sitting with his face closed with his hands but for his eyes . she keeps a her left palm on his shoulder, a shreek icy chillness was felt by both and Shree is taken back to see his body shivering .........
Arun .. Shree being worried bends to him, touches his neck with her slender fingers . Arun, are u ok . ?
Ya ya im fine .. so saying, he gets up and walks towards the window and keeps both his hands on the bars .. Shree walks behind him and stands closely to him taking his hand and embracing with her chest and takes his fingers and keeps them on her cheek and smiles . Arun neenga poi rest eduthukongo please . U must be tired .
I am ok Shree . Just worried .. I mean .
Ok ok . I get u . Neenga aathukku poi thoongittu naalaikku kaarthaala vaango .. enna
NO NO I am ok .
Ok fine u are ok . But u are tired adhaan solren . So saying she takes his hand and pulled him thru the bed . And she sits on the bed while he stands besides her .she pulls him in front of her and catches his ears and bends him towards her .. and joins her forehead with his .. he slowly kneels down and keeps his folded hands on her thighs and keeps his cheek on them .. Shree takes his cheeks by her soft hands and watches him closely into his eyes .
Is there something u want to tell me .. while she speaks a sparkle in his eyes .
:arrow:
Mathi almost running watches the hospital on the opposite side ..... he turns left to see if any vehicles are coming over and sees a truck coming at a little distance .... making up his mind to cross over before the truck could pass .... and as he starts crossing the road ...... while he forgets to turn to his right ..... when ...................... HaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaRP ..........
He was pulled back by his hand and the car pasts swiftly past him . Blowing the horn . And at a distance, he could see a hand lifting finger . He turns back to see an unfamiliar face .
U almost killed urself ..
Oh well I am sorry .. naan I didnt notice .
bending down to take his glasses ....... I am Arun ..
Arun well so saying he smiles with tension still running on his face I am Mathi . Arun Mathi .
Oh wat a co-incidence we have the same names Thamizhaaaaaaa .
Well ys n no . So saying he giggles .. basically from jaffna . Guess u know
Well, ys . Though not much in details I ve heard that its a place for many Srilankan Tamils, right so saying he could see his face turning towards the other side of the road Goin the other side ?
Yeah ys
Vaanga, sendhe povom .. so saying Arun keeps his hand on Mathis shoulder m just walkin my way to the hospita .... well well ... vyadhi kaaranaa illa ...says Arun winking his brownish eyes ....
Oh well naanum anga dhaan varen
Saying both started to walk towards the pavement . Reaching the hospital
Well, i actually had forgotten my tickets in the reception .. lemme take a look at it . Nice meeting u . Arun .. saying he smiles
Oh ys sure . Nice meeting u
Oh nice to see the birds on their nests the voice that made Aruns turn towards the East Wing corridor .
Dr.Chris together says both Aruns and looks at each others face n smiles in amazement ..
Oh yeah Oh yeah .. I ve always wanted u guys to meet .. Arun . This is Dr.Mathi . Mathi This is Dr. Arun .. so saying Dr. Chris walks towards them
Guys .... do u have a minute .... ?
with both nodding n smiling at the same time ....
the doc shows his hand towards the lift saying Shall we .
The lift door closes behind the three
Saga 33 : Let me list .. is the anagram for It tells me
Do u having a DEBIT CARD proves u nothing but BAD CREDIT ;-)
:P
:thumbsup:
yes.. adhE vEgathula nagarudhu.. ( enakku konjam font problem irukku.. letters clear-aa illa....thirumba oru thadavai gavanichu padikkaNum enRu thONudhu... ellArukkum apdithAnA ? _
madhu: enakkum adhE problem! :)
Vasanth: continue.... waiting for the next episode :)
Madhu: enakum font problem irukku.. Still could read it ..
Vasanth : A good one ... 2 Aruns :shock:
Anyhow, the pace is fast... :victory: Seekiram post pannunga .. :nailbiting:
Naan Saga va copy paNNi Word-la paste paNNi font-a increase paNNi padichen :oops:
Bingle: fast fast next episode fast-a post paNNunga :clap:
really going good :thumbsup:
well thanks for ur compliments .... not sure wat font problems that u are facing ..... well, naan eppavum pola, conversations ellam ITALICS la yum normal expressions n descriptions normal text la yum pottirukku ....
:roll: but i still dont understand wat is the font problem .... lemme pm NOV, probably he can help us .....
I think the tscii tag should be removed for better viewing. Vasanth, you edit your post and remove the tscii tags..
That should work. :)
The ... are turning to some font when tscii tag is added .Quote:
Originally Posted by bingleguy
I actually did the same ... and it worked... :-) not sure why tat got added by itself .... udaneve senjutten ;-)Quote:
Originally Posted by rami
Well so ... indha saga la onnum different aa theriyalayaa ;-) dont u feel something was revealed ;-) munnadi padichadhu marandhu ponadhu naala ;-) indha situation aaa ;-) :P
:clap:
coins are moving faster :)
Very enjoyable, Author is keeping up with trends :DQuote:
Originally Posted by bingleguy
:shock: :shock: :shock: :shock: :shock: :shock: :shock: :shock: Shakthi ... neenga padikkarelaa indha kadhaiyaa ????????? Nightmares varudhunnu sonnele ;-) indha kadhaiya padichaa :PQuote:
Originally Posted by Shakthiprabha
athu engaathukaarar illaatha pothu :DQuote:
Originally Posted by bingleguy
avar tour pona, unga kathaiyai PADIKKA matten :D
btw,
mathi, arun-mathi (ETHO... NAAN NINAICHA MATHIRI THAAN.. but not quite.. lets c.. :D )
:lol: adhu seri .... ippo dhairiyamaa padipelaakkum ;-) hmn ...
well if u have judged it .... Good :-) well n good ....
Mathi, Arun-Mathi nnu sonneengalae ??? :roll: wat are u trying to tell.....Arun and Arun Mathi are the two different characters ..... ! :roll:
Nice return to form !
subtle and highly visual. Well written.Quote:
Originally Posted by bingleguy
Remember reading this "shall we" and lift, long back. Either there is some loop connecting it or perhaps some deja-vu taking effect :P
Interesting turn to the Mathi- Arun line. Was the similarity of situations outlined till now just some clever narration, or you still have something up your sleeve. Will wait and watch. :thumbsup:
PR .... was waiting for ur inputs to post the next episode :PQuote:
Originally Posted by Prabhu Ram
:lol: seri seri ..... makkale ... adikkaadheenga :mrgreen:
Well ..... ys .... his style of talking :P idhai gavanithu vechukkalaam :P well as such tis very complicated ;-) andha mudichai eppadi jaakardhaiyaa avukka poren nnu theriyala :-) kadavul dhaan andha sakthi yai kodukkanum .... paakalaam :-)
:lol: well well well this could be a turning point in the story :P probably... still i ve not mentioned about the timeline when both the sequences were happenning .... ;-) which is another catch....
I may complete it soon :-)
BG!!!!... i read it again FULLYYYY in one stretch!!!... so plsssssssss update it soon b4 i forget the story again!! :P
n ofcourse... its goin GR8!!!! :D
BG...you're in cahoots with the bp docs aren't you? Cause mine is just coasting up and down....always with the questions...and not less but more and more intriguing...the coincidences are so culminating but the story has captured to the extent that it becomes a dread....more things to happen....really BG we're just innocent readers....us novel readers by each good novel are affected but it fades with time...an image persists perhaps a line or two....but this...images upon images....lines upon lines...countless faces in our minds each of us imagining a different voice a different face for your characters...and still we are enthralled to know the same story the same plot the same elusive meaning...
My Goodness Q :-) admire your choice of words :-) really ! we are just novices ;-) in understanding :PQuote:
Originally Posted by Querida
bg in cahoots with bp :P ..... bg is really so very unpremeditated while writing :P ... m very naive in the world of writers ! I m really not sure if i am worth the compliments ! :notworthy:
Hey since you're not sure whether you deserve such praise i'll just tell you out straight: Vasanth you deserve every bit. :D
Tats an honor ! :oops:Quote:
Originally Posted by Querida
I really m worried about raising expectations ! well, this gives a lot of pressure on the writer ! i am not sure, if ppl who write the stories in regular periods face the same pinch !
enakku bayamaa irukku !
uhhh Vasanth...that's not what good praise is supposed to do...it's supposed to give you more confidence not fear! Just do things as they come...as i told you before Art is not a pressured science it has a mind of its own...let it be your muse :D
Hi BingleGuy,
Let me start by reiterating the fact that Deja Vu is simply amazing, the length and the duration of the thread and not to forget everyone else's involvement is a singular accomplishment and stands apart.
Unlike the early bird hubbers, I had the opportunity to read Deja Vu from start until this point like a novel (er. like a text of screen play) & see the pieces of the puzzle coming closer.
Right now (with much effrontery i must confess) this seems like a dejavu of 'chandra Kantha', which started out fabulously, pulled in all the essentials, garnered the necessary makings of a great and in the middle, there were even rumors that the original script was lost and it was finally shelved. one could argue that it was the way of the Indian Cricket Team (barring their current form).
(hoping for a resurrection) :cry:
My GoodNess :) Killua !Quote:
Originally Posted by killua
Really overwhelmed by your words ! :notworthy: Love to read those words again n again ;-)
well ... i understand the situation ! i really m not spending enuf time in the creation of the same ... tats the only reason ! i really feel tat things should flow when i begin to write ... many a times i opened a notepad to continue ... but really got nothing out of the keys .... really a pathetic situation at tat moment ! well .... i pretty much feel that i should start writing it ... otherwise it is really gonna be something really bad ! But thanks again for ur inspiring words ! i shall really look for ur continued satisfaction :-) which is a boost for me !
hayya..
meeNdum vasantham :redjump:
Saga 34 : Mad Era
Shree .... so saying Arun lifts his head and reads the clock ... while Sri looks the side of his face ... he turns to look at her face, unable to do so, he looks at her hands ....
Shree, knowing this is her turn to talk ..... slowly gets up fully from her slanting position with the support of both her hands..seeing which Arun sees her again .. taking both her hands to his collar, holds them tight and pulls him towards her..kept his forehead on hers..raising her hear slowly up, her drenched lips reach for his forehead wrinkles..by the time her hands slowly moved from his collar touching his jaws and firms on his cheeks..she presses her lips firmly and he feels relaxed from a swarm of tensions..her heaven reaches his eyelids and his nose tip..when he closes his eyes and waits..when she quickly reaches for his ear and gives it a bite..
sssssssshaaaa .... was his reaction, when she quickly gives a naughty laugh.. hugs him on his shoulders and places a firm kiss on his left cheek..now her eyes were firmly on his.. when she begins to open her lips..he begins talking...
I met him in Singapore..... when i almost saved him from falling prey to a car..His name was Arun..Arun Mathi...
the doc shows his hand towards the lift saying Shall we .
The lift door closes behind the three ......
so saying Arun slowly moves his face from hers .... and walks towards the window ... he could hear the fade noise of the vehicles on the road. He turns back to her with his hands behind and his head leaning on the window seeing the revolving Khaitan fan ... enga sandhippu vidhiyaasamaa irundhaalum, naanga seekiram friends aayittom... first thing was ... rendu peroda perum orey maadiri irundhadhu dhaan ! aachariya maa dhaan irundhudhu ... swings his head
towards her and says enna aachariyam ngriyaa .... enga rendu perukkum peru mattum onnu illa ... enga profession ... enga field of research ... ellame related
..... he too was a doctor - and was doin his research on Dreams ..... my subject was deja vu ..... rendukkum oru othumai irukku ..... ys... you can
feel deja vu ... ur dream sometimes makes u feel it ....
naanga rendu perum Dr. Chris ai meet panninom .... avar kooda pesina appuram dhaan therinjudhu ... Naanum Mathiyum, were supposed to meet in India for a study - for a research which combines deja vu and dream ! enga rendu peraiyum introduce panni vechaar..... we decided to meet again for dinner .....
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why dont u and ur family join me for dinner .... was the question from Arun, when he slides his hair on his forehead ....
ya, why not .... tat would be a pleasure .... says Mathi with his hand into his pockets ...
Arun n Mathi walks down the aisle .... enga saapida pogalaam .... enakku inga avvalavaa places theriyaadhu ..... says Arun
neenga vegetarian aa illa ... ???
pure vegetarian ... .... says Arun giggling ...
Komala vilas irukke .... nalla vaazha ilai pottu unavu parimaaruvaanga ..... tasty too ....
oh kool .... enga irukku,
inga dhaan Serangoon road la dhaan ....
meanwhile reaching the lift, Arun takes his left had to press the button..... and turns towards Mathi ...
sure Mathi ...
enna time .... thinks for a second and gives a hymn with his eyes seeing the top .... should 7 be ok ???
yeah ... sounds good .... anga meet pannalaam ..... by the time the lift reaches to ground floor and when Mathi begins to speak ..... ok then, naan reception kku poittu varen .... i had missed something there .... naama evening meet pannalam .....
ya, ok .... c u there ....
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Little India ... correct dhaan ..... namma ooru maadiri dhaan irukku ......
Komala Vilas unavagam ...... hmn, romba pazha restaurant pola irukke .... so saying Arun crosses the road and starts to walk towards the restaurant ... well well well ..... vaazhai ilai bhojanam ... Singapore la .... indha sowriyam anga illaye .... Arun walks into the restaurant and sees the crowded place ... adeyappa ... was a thought in his mind .....
he finds a table to seat four and pulls the chair behind to sit comfortably facing the entrance ... when a bearer comes to him Sir, neengal thaniya irukkeengala ? when Arun immediately answers ... No, illa... ennoda friends rendu peru varuvaanga ..... oru 5 mins ....
Hearing this the bearer says .... seri sir .... and moves from the place ...... when behind him ..... a breeze enters the restaurant .... Arun couldnt control from watching her glazing eyes...She walks as a swift breeze with her hand moving upwards to move the hair sliding forward .... she dips her lips inwards and pushes the front hair behind her ears and walks towards .... she was leaning forward and her eyes was searching for somebody .... and he watches only her eyes...... she gazed thru the restaurant ... and the moment he sees her eyes on him ... he could feel the heat and immediately takes his eyes away from her and starts to watch the fan .... useless me - paathutta ..... now she starts coming towards him .... Arun could feel his heart beating faster.....
he takes the glass of water and tries sipping ... when she comes to him and says .... Vanakkam ....he couldnt control - and startled he starts
coughing .... spilling the water on the table ....
oh shhhhh ...oh shhhh ... m sorry ... terribly sorry .... my bad ...
tats ok ... tats ok ....
sorry ....
ok sir ...no problem .... so saying the lady comes near the table and looks at Arun to say naan ukkaralaamaa ......
Saga 34 : Mad Era is the anagram for A Dream ......
Do u see an ADMIRER sure he is MARRIED ;-)
really superb narration Vasanth... :clap:
keep going...
One request....Let the breeze visit the shore frequently ;)
Arthi ;-) hope u enjoyed it ;-) :P ..... naanum appadi dhaan ninaikiren ;-) adhukku dhaan try panren ....Quote:
Originally Posted by Arthi
hayya.... pakkam vandhaachu :redjump:
Hi BG,
Nice to have you back.
One of those lie-low something-is-brewing episodes.
I await more.
One point: The paragraph-long description of the intimacy is getting a bit repetitive. Not that it is unenjoyable. Just that it feels familiar to such descriptions once in every few chapters...hey deja vu !
Thanks for ur time PR !!!Quote:
Originally Posted by Prabhu Ram
PR .... i believe this is bought the second time ... first time ... it was for describing the love of newly married ... its very necessary to be not just romantic but fiercely intimate ....secondly now ... which is to show an understanding relationship which is romantic as they knew each other so very well ....
inbetween :lol: there were two instances where i had to bring back the first intimacy - as as continuation to the saga from the previous one :lol: so it might have stood in ur mind .....
as such i dnt remember any other instance bringing up closing intimacy .... :roll: correct me if am wrong !!!!
Oh fine. Perhaps it is just me ageing. After all, who are you and me to pass judgement about when the couple chooses to be intimate ;-)
point taken !!!
:lol:
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Originally Posted by prabhuram
Hello BG,
today has been a very odd day...woke up super early...had ideas buzzing around in my head...actually felt like expressing my views about current fave show it has been soooo long since I have come here, and while typing looked up to see my inbox tab and came upon your message...it fits well with the oddness of your latest episode :) smooth narration as ever...hope for something more substantial soon...but that is just a reader's desire not to be teased even further with intrigue...please watch your spelling BG...yes we have the ability to guess what a word might be from context...but simple editing is always appreciated...can't wait for next episode!
:lol: oddness huh ..... well well well ..... m still not getting if tis the writer's or the reader's :P :lol:Quote:
Originally Posted by Querida
anyways .... i seem to lose my readers ;-) these days, especially due to my lagging sagas ..... n as such, i run the risk of losing to reminded ones too ;-) over period of time .... somehow, it doesnt always flow when i plan to write ... it should come from within and it should come adhoc ... otherwise tis a mess ...... m waiting for the next right moment .... my home trip should gimme some boost i believe ;-) :P :lol:
Thanks for ur time Q ... n i value ur ideas next to PR ..... so i really appreciate your dedication towards reading .... Well ;-) reg the spelling ... my bad .... i hope i got it right ... :P if there is more, kindly point it out .... not an intrigue though :P
Aaahaaa!! arumaiyaaga ezhuthi irukeenga bg....looking fwd for more......:-) ty for taking time despite yr hectic schedule to write this.....:-)