hey .. no ya .... jus tht my story is that confusin n stupid ..
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hey .. no ya .... jus tht my story is that confusin n stupid ..
no u r not............its just me, it always take lots of time for me to understand ..............just see around ..........i always ask ppl to explain me stuffs........................dont blame urself :)Quote:
Originally Posted by chevy
Ok...........i guess..........vinod is killed by that girl.................
according to the diary.............that person is been killed in that dressing room.........and she is going to take revenge .............which means that the girl Vindod was about to see must have been that person in the diary..............or she is been haunted by ghost or sth.................... its all i can undersatnd from the story.......... :oops:
oh dear..............sorry for being so dumb..............
never give up, keep writing, there r lots of talented person here, they may help u and ...........improve ur writing :) it isnt like u r bad or sth and that u have to improve, iam just trying to say that u will write much better ........with others help and responses. :)
Vasavi.
The story sails smoothly like some sooper dooper silver screen story....then in the end utter confusion....too eerie too....who gets killed....Vinod or Suresh?...if Preeti is a ghost how does a ghost carry on internet chatting....... :frightened: moral: perhaps beware of online ghosts :lol:
I am more dumb than Crazy! Really can't disentangle the knot! :idontgetit: :(
Let us wait for our bright fellow hubbers to come & unsolve the mystery & find out the moral! :yes:
hieee .. .thanks .. first of all for reading the story ...
well .. i never say that any body is dead or is getting killed .. . it is the reader perception of the story . .to decide what happens in the end..
but it is the obvious the ending is not something good for vinod..
the moral would be ..
sometimes .. we may have to listen to those younger to us...
in this case... suresh is younger. . people think he's this loafer of the family .. but practically he seemed to have more sense than his elder bro .... he tells vinod that she could be anyone ...jus tryin to win his sympathy ... vinod falls into the trap of friendship..with this bizzare girl .. who' won't make herself available in the daytime .. it is ironical that a very educated adult like vinod should fall trap into such friendships. ..
welll ... leavin the "spooky" part of the story ... one part that i was tryin to convey is that .. there are people .... very sensible...very educated .. and very much ..matured ..who befriend people on the net and hav got cheated ...
another thing is that i am not tryin to insist that e-friendships are stupid ..and lead to unnecessary consequences ... . so i decided to leave the story w/o an endind .. let the reader decide...
hieee .. .thanks .. first of all for reading the story ...
well .. i never say that any body is dead or is getting killed .. . it is the reader perception of the story . .to decide what happens in the end..
but it is the obvious the ending is not something good for vinod..
the moral would be ..
sometimes .. we may have to listen to those younger to us...
in this case... suresh is younger. . people think he's this loafer of the family .. but practically he seemed to have more sense than his elder bro .... he tells vinod that she could be anyone ...jus tryin to win his sympathy ... vinod falls into the trap of friendship..with this bizzare girl .. who' won't make herself available in the daytime .. it is ironical that a very educated adult like vinod should fall trap into such friendships. ..
welll ... leavin the "spooky" part of the story ... one part that i was tryin to convey is that .. there are people .... very sensible...very educated .. and very much ..matured ..who befriend people on the net and hav got cheated ...
another thing is that i am not tryin to insist that e-friendships are stupid ..and lead to unnecessary consequences ... . so i decided to leave the story w/o an endind .. let the reader decide...
hieee .. .thanks .. first of all for reading the story ...
well .. i never say that any body is dead or is getting killed .. . it is the reader perception of the story . .to decide what happens in the end..
but it is the obvious the ending is not something good for vinod..
the moral would be ..
sometimes .. we may have to listen to those younger to us...
in this case... suresh is younger. . people think he's this loafer of the family .. but practically he seemed to have more sense than his elder bro .... he tells vinod that she could be anyone ...jus tryin to win his sympathy ... vinod falls into the trap of friendship..with this bizzare girl .. who' won't make herself available in the daytime .. it is ironical that a very educated adult like vinod should fall trap into such friendships. ..
welll ... leavin the "spooky" part of the story ... one part that i was tryin to convey is that .. there are people .... very sensible...very educated .. and very much ..matured ..who befriend people on the net and hav got cheated ...
another thing is that i am not tryin to insist that e-friendships are stupid ..and lead to unnecessary consequences ... . so i decided to leave the story w/o an endind .. let the reader decide...
hi .. .thanks .. first of all for reading the story ...
well .. i never say that any body is dead or is getting killed .. . it is the reader perception of the story . .to decide what happens in the end..
but it is the obvious the ending is not something good for vinod..
the moral would be ..
sometimes .. we may have to listen to those younger to us...
in this case... suresh is younger. . people think he's this loafer of the family .. but practically he seemed to have more sense than his elder bro .... he tells vinod that she could be anyone ...jus tryin to win his sympathy ... vinod falls into the trap of friendship..with this bizzare girl .. who' won't make herself available in the daytime .. it is ironical that a very educated adult like vinod should fall trap into such friendships. ..
welll ... leavin the "spooky" part of the story ... one part that i was tryin to convey is that .. there are people .... very sensible...very educated .. and very much ..matured ..who befriend people on the net and hav got cheated ...
another thing is that i am not tryin to insist that e-friendships are stupid ..and lead to unnecessary consequences ... . so i decided to leave the story w/o an endind .. let the reader decide...
Holy Mother Of God!! :shock: :shock:
WOW!!! :D :D I love reading and writing creepy stuff, I've also written a couple so-called wierd short stories in this section a couple years ago...but this is just....
Ok...I've got a million things rushing into my head right now...i'll write one by one.
Excellent JOB!! :D :D This is so far, THE BEST piece of writing that I've read in this section! The story is REALLY thrilling!!! :D Even though we don't know anything abt Preethi, her past, her death and her thurst for blood...I was creeped out since the beggining for some reason....maybe because it's 12:54 AM here and all the lights in the house are switched off, and i'm in my dark room reading....but I seriously think that the way you narrate the story is mindblowing!! :D I'm unable.....to pinpoint what it is that gave me a creepish feeling...something in the way you narrated though...expicially the CHATTING part...:thumbsup: The way you've presented the series of unfortunate events (:P) is excellent! :D PLEASE DO WRITE OTHER STORIES! :D
Now...Lemme see if I got the ending right..:P
*Vinodh is outside..he starts towards the dressing room when we hear of him last.
*Suresh, who is aware of the ghost, wants to save his brother. :)
*Now...the ending is left to the imagination of the reader! (Excellent idea btw!!!)
-------*Vinodh could've gone in and gotten murdered.
OR
------*Vinodh might've given up, and turned back, and Suresh might've barged into the Dressing Room in hopes to save his brother.
Any of those things might have happend...or maybe it was neither Vinodh or Suresh who was mudered...:wink:
The ending is left with a very good "?" to keep the noodle of the reader going. :P That was really awesome! 8-)
Also:
I really like how you describe Chennai and the other minute (Please do excuse my spelling :banghead: ) details which make a big difference.
*The Weather.
*The Gurkha with the Pan Stained Teeth.
*Traffic.
NICELY DONE!! :thumbsup: :D
Holy Mother Of God!! :shock: :shock:
WOW!!! :D :D I love reading and writing creepy stuff, I've also written a couple so-called wierd short stories in this section a couple years ago...but this is just....
Ok...I've got a million things rushing into my head right now...i'll write one by one.
Excellent JOB!! :D :D This is so far, THE BEST piece of writing that I've read in this section! The story is REALLY thrilling!!! :D Even though we don't know anything abt Preethi, her past, her death and her thurst for blood...I was creeped out since the beggining for some reason....maybe because it's 12:54 AM here and all the lights in the house are switched off, and i'm in my dark room reading....but I seriously think that the way you narrate the story is mindblowing!! :D I'm unable.....to pinpoint what it is that gave me a creepish feeling...something in the way you narrated though...expicially the CHATTING part...:thumbsup: The way you've presented the series of unfortunate events (:P) is excellent! :D PLEASE DO WRITE OTHER STORIES! :D
Now...Lemme see if I got the ending right..:P
*Vinodh is outside..he starts towards the dressing room when we hear of him last.
*Suresh, who is aware of the ghost, wants to save his brother. :)
*Now...the ending is left to the imagination of the reader! (Excellent idea btw!!!)
-------*Vinodh could've gone in and gotten murdered.
OR
------*Vinodh might've given up, and turned back, and Suresh might've barged into the Dressing Room in hopes to save his brother.
Any of those things might have happend...or maybe it was neither Vinodh or Suresh who was mudered...:wink:
The ending is left with a very good "?" to keep the noodle of the reader going. :P That was really awesome! 8-)
Also:
I really like how you describe Chennai and the other minute (Please do excuse my spelling :banghead: ) details which make a big difference.
*The Weather.
*The Gurkha with the Pan Stained Teeth.
*Traffic.
NICELY DONE!! :thumbsup: :D
My shot @ the Moral: You Never Know What's On The Other Side Of The Keyboard...So make smart decisions when interacting with e-pals? :huh: